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Posted: Sat May 09, 2020 3:12 am Post subject: Metronome, Alaska |
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Metronome, Alaska
Low, slow clouds. Absurd.
dissolving iron rain, brittle.
Acid traces. Phospheresence,
slate shade, the morning sky.
Buried under tar and steel.
Ambient dust. You bury the
lede, as deep as the Atlantic
cable. Your life in April.
Thalidomide frost in spring.
Paris Green is summer.
Under a constant blue sun.
Thaumaturgic. Sour mash
trees in half moon, quarter
moon, all day dawn. Breaking.
Graphite shrubs, scrub brush
and marsh standing along in
salt pools. Charcoal brooks
wend, wind and oxbow along
lazily, haphazardly. Quietly.
Coves of neon glitter litter
aside the straits. Unevenly.
Tidepools. Stagnant, brackish.
By the tar plains, kites skitter.
Terns turn and flutter. Toxics,
oils and plastics amongst the
bleached white bones of saints,
prophets and early visionaries. _________________ life's not a paragraph
And death i think is no parenthesis”
― E.E. Cummings
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deer of the dawn On a mission from God

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I love how the dismal background makes those few beauties "pop". _________________ Be kind, for everyone you meet is fighting a great battle. -Philo of Alexandria
ahhhh... if only all our creativity in wickedness could be fixed by "Corrupt a Wish." - Linna Heartlistener |
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Posted: Sat May 30, 2020 11:21 pm Post subject: |
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Thank.you Deer. _________________ life's not a paragraph
And death i think is no parenthesis”
― E.E. Cummings
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Lazy Luke License to Copycat
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Posted: Mon Jun 01, 2020 1:39 pm Post subject: |
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Yeah, a fine collection of well tuned discordance.
Had to look up oxbow, didn't know that word. |
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Posted: Wed Jun 03, 2020 11:51 pm Post subject: |
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I think you missed an opportunity with the name of the city.
Something like:
Low, slow clouds. Absurd.
dissolving iron rain. Absurd.
Acid traces. Slate shade. Absurd.
Morning sky under tar and steel. Absurd.
Ambient dust. You bury the lede. Absurd.
As deep as the Atlantic cable. Absurd.
And so on. _________________ "This is the sort of bloody nonsense up with which I will not put."
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Posted: Thu Jun 04, 2020 11:51 am Post subject: |
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Thank you for the suggestion.
I do appreciate the input. _________________ life's not a paragraph
And death i think is no parenthesis”
― E.E. Cummings
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